Write with a Cadence and Rhythm

Don’t start every sentence with the subject then go to the verb. Vary your sentence structure.

Use a mix of short and long sentences.

Avoid run-on sentences. Any sentence over 20 words long needs a period in the middle.

Use a string of shorter sentences to build tension.

Never have more than one or two descriptive paragraphs at a time. Lengthy narratives are like lumps in the gravy. Smooth them out over the entire manuscript or you risk losing your readers. Modern fiction is character driven and an omnipotent narrator describing things slows your story down.